Sheepishly,
he crept into the flat, having first taken off his shoes outside the door.
Hesitant,
with infinite care,
he put down each foot and froze every time a floorboard creaked.
He hardly knew now what had made him accept the woman's
invitation
to come in for a coffee.
All he had planned to do was to see her home,
safely;
she wasn't even his concern,
she had been his friend's date.
Soon,
it would be morning.
The love of his life lay, fast asleep, in their bed;
it was hardly worthwhile joining her there,
he'd only wake her,
an inconsiderate thing to do in the small hours,
he said to himself.
He would lie down on the sofa in their living room instead.
By the thin light of early dawn filtering through the half-drawn curtains
he saw La Gioconda on the wall above the sofa;
She knew
and he knew she knew.
i love the stories you tell friko. they always feel like they are part of something bigger. a moment in a long telling. steven
ReplyDeleteThe rat!
ReplyDeleteI always look forward to reading your take on the Magpie Tales photo prompt and this one is another wonderful write.
ReplyDeleteWonderful piece, well written!
ReplyDeleteA perfect story!
ReplyDeletePearl
Oddly enough I have always felt that was the look she held...a smirk...sort of I know what you know.
ReplyDeleteSo, she knew...and that look....ah, now it makes sense. Very clever take. vb
ReplyDeleteI always wondered why Mona Lisa had that telling smile on her face! Now I know! Very engaging tale, Friiko!
ReplyDeleteoh yes she did...and he is in so much trouble...lol nice write...
ReplyDeleteweisst Du, dass ich das Bild sehr liebe?! Und dann Deine bedeutungsvolle Fantasie über dieses Bild ist wirklich wohltuend und nachdenklich machend, heute Morgen... Wundervoll!
ReplyDeleteAlles Gute und alles Liebe von
Renée
Perfectly sums up the smug look on her face.
ReplyDeleteand she did, indeed, know.
ReplyDeleteShe knows everything.
ReplyDeleteI like this short fiction, Friko!
Will Lisa keep his secret? Clever take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteOo er!!
ReplyDeleteGood one. This rings true.
ReplyDeleteHa ha--exactly! Great magpie, Friko.
ReplyDeleteBig smile here at the ending. Never saw it coming - how clever!!! You do have your fun, don't you...?
ReplyDeleteThe wife always knows or at least this wife would!
ReplyDeleteOnly you, Friko, would go there with
ReplyDeletethat famous smile, and the folly that
is men. This time your cleverness almost
overtook your imagination, for this
one resonates with too many of us.
Shame on us, and good on you!
You will love the image I used
for my reposting of this gem.
She certainly does have that knowing look...and what she knows about each of us...wow...
ReplyDeleteHow wonderful !
ReplyDeleteShe's for sale over here at a local Flohmarkt for 45 Euro. Please have a good Wednesday.
"She knew
ReplyDeleteand he knew she knew." Such simple words, yet oh, so telling!
Excellent. I really like that!
ReplyDeletePerfection in the knowing. Excellent piece!
ReplyDeleteBusted! But will she say anything? She hasn't yet ... all these years centures ... but still. Your story brings us yet another "art lover" who will be very worriedly trying to decipher the world's most celebrated enigmatic smile.
ReplyDeleteShe knew
ReplyDeleteand he knew she knew ... perfect! Oh I loved it :o)
Superb Friko! I've just read it again! Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
You have pinned down the look on her face beautifully. The "love of his life" will know too, I guess!
ReplyDeleteHow do you justify the random line lengths? Would a single prose paragraph detract from the story?
Oh, yes, she has that mocking, knowing half-smile - not to be trusted, that one!
ReplyDeleteGood lead-up, great end-stanza.
ReplyDeleteI think you've summed up her smile quite nicely. He's in a lot of strife too! Great Mag.
ReplyDeleteHe's a very naughty boy!
ReplyDeleteAlways a pleasure to visit your blog, Friko.
Spooky and brilliant!
ReplyDeleteAnother good write. Thanks, Friko
ReplyDeleteWhat an absolute gem. Women know..........
ReplyDelete