Friday, 14 January 2011

Fun With (Sort Of) Haiku



Night meanderings,
sleep evades restless Friko,
she dreams up Haiku.

only two returned her call.
A muted welcome.

She will try once more,
perhaps they'll notice her now.
If they don't, too bad.

o-o-o-o-o

Cyberspace Glory.
Another lucky blogger
made Blogger of Note.

All over blogland
spelling mistakes, poor grammar.
Who taught the teachers?


o-o-o-o-o

Enough fun.
Stop her, somebody.
Technically,
these may be haiku,
as in 5-7-5.
But lyrically,
they are to Classic Haiku
what finger exercises
are to Chopin Ă‰tudes.




Sorry Rebecca, your site is lovely and I really don't mean to belittle your artistic endeavours, which have great merit. But it's late, I'm exhausted, and my head won't leave me alone. I promise to do better another time.


36 comments:

  1. I tried some haiku a while back. it's harder than you'd think to come up with something lyrical.

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  2. good morning friko!
    seriously...you have me in laughter and needed relief. you have a clever mind and caustic wit. i need you!
    think of music....we need the full range of notes, and the pauses....that allow the heart to hear passion by comparison.
    so too in art, contrast, spaces, a place for the eyes to rest.
    you are a blend of layered spices.
    delicious.

    i think last week you discovered haiku a bit late. this is an "early" crowd....
    there should be great activity today, and then,the rush of energy will move on.
    i will check in at the end of the day and see if you are well welcomed.
    which is my hope, for all those who arrive, will leave rewarded.
    thanks for being here.

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  3. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Thanks.
    As regards it being technically 'Haiku' or not this is a matter that I've struggled with on my onw rather laboured posts. Nowadays I don't care. If it's fun that's always enough. And your post is enormous fun.

    Have a nice day, Boonie

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  4. i suppose i should say something nice but i think you would think it trite...things we have all probably thought, typed out loud...hello, friko

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  5. I was going to say that fun with haiku is an oxymoron but I laughed my ass off with yours.

    By the way, my word verification this time was Palin - the cyberspace gods are toying with me.

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  6. You make me smile, if only for a while, but who other than myself, gives a care. What a fun entry.
    BlessYourHeart

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  7. I love your creativity! Thanks for the smile. :)

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  8. Sure beats counting sheep! Whatever their merits as haiku, I can tell you I thoroughly enjoyed the Friko tone coming through every one. And what a beautiful photograph!

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  9. You say 'only' 2.
    I'm pleased with two.
    I've had 7 once.
    I was delirious.
    You've been spoiled I reckon :-)

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  10. Today is a day for getting things off one's chest! LOL. I'll email you another example, I think!

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  11. Hearing finches chirp.
    Soft warm doggies all around.
    Life is just perfect.

    ;)

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  12. I think you'll draw them all in with your Haiku here!!

    good thing we don't take ourselves to seriously

    x..x

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  13. Blogger of Note made
    by testosterone filled youth
    Just looking for edge

    Who needs to follow the rules of language?

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  14. Friko - I'm like you, I wonder about poets who can't spell and don't know anything about grammar or composition. Apparently, those things, like us, are things of the past.
    I really admire you for having such a good brain that it could wrap itself around English spelling and grammar. It isn't easy. Many, many people, whose first language is English, never learn as much as you did.
    We are now in a new era. I don't understand it, I don't understand why it happened, but it did. The English language is evolving and dissolving at the same time.
    Abbreviations surround us, many of which I can't decode, and many of which drive me to distraction.
    When my husband says "RBC" I put my nose in the air and say, "I assume you refer to the Royal Bank of Canada?" in a snooty tone of voice.
    My husband is a retired teacher. He graduated from McGill University. The "simplification" of everything doesn't bother him at all. He accepts the abbreviations, and uses them quite happily, while I rage and suffer at the degradation of my beautiful language. There are no more rules.
    You can un-join Haiku My Heart (to coin a phrase) if you still feel unwelcome, but I think they need someone like you. We all need someone like you.
    -- K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  15. oy dont judgee me by my grammar...smiles. fun haiku...and glad i am not the only one that cant sleep for writing..

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  16. Is it 5-7-5 words or lines? I forgot. Teacher, teacher. Help.

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  17. Only two replies ?
    But maybe most haiku-fans
    not insomniac ?

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  18. There are so very many poetic
    forms out there if one decides
    to wear a corset while writing.
    I often am impressed with some
    haiku that "click", that work for
    me despite their confinement
    for the words. Frost said free verse
    is tennis with the net down,
    which is perhaps more challenging
    in some way. It is like rhyme schemes;
    after decades of letting the words
    lead the way, when I see a perfectly
    executed a/b, a/b rhyme, it just
    shuts me down; my bad to be so
    crass, so dim, so unwilling to work
    within limits, but there it is. Often
    in your case your prose itself is'
    expressed poetically, beautifully.
    Language should communicate,
    and poetry can be an apex experience
    in that regard.

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  19. oh, this made me laugh!! Love it!

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  20. That first 5-7-5 was great. It told a story about you and a sleepless night and a jhourney into haiku. The rest I just don't understand.

    Peace.

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  21. Very funny. Like you haiku.

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  22. easy friko - take it easy!!!! steven

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  23. I quite like Haiku, especially when it has a humourous edge to it. Great fun. Go crazy with it! ;)

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  24. Unsleeping Friko
    Courts Morpheus by counting
    Haiku syllables.

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  25. welcome, welcome, welcome friko... next week shall blossom and bloom... love yr post, sorta reminds me of someone yelling at the top of their lungs feet firmly planted on the moon... hellooooooo can anybody hear me...

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  26. I won't try to encourage you one way or another. Whatever you write and however you write it, I'm always interested, amused, aroused, sometimes irritated, but never, ever bored!...just keep on writing.

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  27. I'm done with perfection! I left it behind with my last job (secretary or should I say dog's body!)

    Artistic license say's I can break a few rules, so I do, I break a lot!

    Welcome to our tribe,

    Sue x

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  28. small poems of life
    the blossoms of words open
    to reveal a truth

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  29. Excellent fun! I have never written a haiku, but I might give it a try.

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  30. Well done.. that's so honest.. wow... I have done the same way .. kept writing without worrying much.. you have done a lot better and look at the the friends you have drawn to your site.. excellent..we will keep meeting here.

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  31. Wonderful! From now on only do haiku when you're sleep deprived. ;)

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  32. Better? But these are wonderful! Many of my own haiku are mere finger exercises, but occasionally I come up with something as lovely as your top entry.

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  33. welcome sharing your poems with our poetry potluck today..

    you can link in 1 to 3 old poems or poems unrelated to our theme as first time participant, have fun.

    you got talent, keep it up.

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  34. Friko, I love your observations on grammer and the online happenings. I agree with Rebecca about the clever mind and the caustic wit! Very clever....looking forward to more!

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  35. Friko, I've told you before that I don't want to read your posts when I am tired, and even cranky, after returning from a longish work day/night.

    And so, this quiet evening, I am treating myself to a leisurely catch up of your fine writing.

    Haiku is a demanding form, and when catches it, haiku is magic. I think you've got it. xo

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